Reflection (Blog Post #8)

I have to confess that I rarely write for pleasure. I just never thought I had the “writer’s flow” that some are so blessed with. It wasn’t until I started attending my high school, the Lehigh Valley Charter High School for the Arts (otherwise, colorfully known as “Charts”), that I finally found my flow.

The moment I auditioned for this artsy-fartsy school I knew that it was going to change my life. I had been subjected to an entirely new environment – an environment full of artists. Because I was a vocal major, I had to take classes such as Music Theory, Vocal Techniques, Piano, etc. It was Music Theory that really inspired me to pursue musicianship even apart from my required classes. Here I was learning how to write and compose my own music through my own expression. It was as if they mixed my two favorite classes: math and music, into one! Although music is so creative, there’s a structure about it and a way of problem solving.

My junior and senior years of high school were almost completely dedicated to composing and performing. I can recall one of the projects assigned was to create a variation/many variations to a nursery rhyme theme. I chose The Wheels on the Bus. I can remember having so much fun during our in-class work time with friends, sharing our ideas and compilations of harmonies. I wrote three variations of The Wheels on the Bus. One was harmonized and retrograded, another was half-time, and the last was just heavily harmonized to finish strong.

This flashbulb memory of mine will very well stick with me until I am rolling around in my wheel chair. I guarantee it. I’m fairly certain it was the moment I realized, “Hey. I’m pretty great at this. Let me continue writing music”, and so I did. I now have a tiny leather notebook I carry around for whenever I am inspired to write something musical. Though much different than I had anticipated, I had found my “writer’s flow”.

Grant Writing (Blog Post #7)

E CITY (Entrepreneurship: Connecting, Inspiring, and Teaching Youths) is a nonprofit organization that teaches a unique Entrepreneurship program to the students of Cleveland, Ohio. This organization was first established as a “drop-out prevention tool by the National Foundation for Teaching Entrepreneurship (NFTE) in New York City (Cleveland Entrepreneurship Preparatory School 1). E CITY is most effective in strengthening the math skills, personal motivation, and public speaking abilities among the students who participated. Because this organization receives such positive results when working with students, John Zitzner and Marshall Emerson III proposed the idea of the operation of the Cleveland Entrepreneurship Preparatory School (E Prep).

I believe this was an excellent proposal. It clearly stated what it wants to use the money for and how it was going to follow through with its actions. For example, they state persuading and positive remarks about how the production of E Prep is going to ensure that 100% of its students graduate with a business plan and an acceptance to a four-year college or university. In order to accomplish this vision, they plan on enacting extended school days and school years, half-day Saturday classes, a highly structured/disciplined school culture, clear and consistent high standards for behavior and performance, and a professional school uniform.

This grant proposal is more similar than different to those we are writing in class. It is asking a foundation for a grant in order to create or improve upon something, looking at the bigger picture. The proposer’s of this great proposal set it up in a similar way as well – they included a summary, a rationale, participant biographies, appendices, a budget, and other useful information. In this case, it would definitely be a dependable reference if needing a sample grant proposal.

Plagiarism and Remix (Blog Post #6)

Jonathan Lethem enthuses this theory that essentially nothing is original in his essay, “The Ecstasy of Influence”. I tend to agree with this. Sure, there are wildly creative people with colorful imaginations that create things we might not have ever been able to imagine, but those people had to have had an influence or a spark of motivation originating from something else. To have some level of plagiarism is inevitable.

Early on in Lethem’s essay he speaks of a musical songwriter named Muddy Waters who wrote a song for a folklorist named Alan Lomax. Waters starts by telling Lomax that he had made the song “Country Blues” on “about the eighth of October ’38”. He then explains what he did that day and it just came to him (influenced by what happened that day). Lomax then asks him if there are any other songs written with the same tune. Waters replies with knowledge of one song in particular (that may/may not have had influence on him) called “Walkin’ Blues”. Because the songs sound so similar to each other, does that mean Muddy Waters plagiarized Robert Johnson’s song “Walkin’ Blues”? Probably not. He might have just taken a memory of the tune as his influence and made it his own. However, plagiarism in the music industry is a very controversial topic. There are so many cases of this. For example, wouldn’t you say that the bass in Queen’s song “Under Pressure” sounds remarkably similar to the bass in Vanilla Ice’s song “Ice Ice Baby”? These plagiaristic acts usually end up going to court to settle between artists who have “stolen” similar sounds from another.

In addition to the music industry, there is a lot of pressure for originality in everyday life. I have felt this pressure in my earlier school years. If you followed a trend, you copied it from someone. That was the end of the world for middle school students. God forbid you liked the same style as someone else. If you consider all the ideas, fashions, songs, thoughts, etc. then you will begin to realize that there is very little room for genuine originality. Anything can be influential on your choices or judgments.

Research (Blog Post #5)

Research has always been pretty limited to internet or local libraries throughout my years as a student. In junior high school we were restricted to one website, EBSCOhost, or the school’s library. My high school did not have a library to offer as another way to research for assignments, but we were free to research the entirety of the world wide web. I prefer research done online rather than searching for library books because it is easier and more mobile. However, all websites are not the best sources for good research.

My last research paper was for my Senior Showcase at my high school. We were required to research the composer of the song we performed in our Senior Showcase. I found this to be pretty easy overall. It was just looking over many biographies of my composer, Jason Robert Brown, and introducing him in my own words in an essay format. The hardest part about researching is making sure you are finding reliable sources. If the information can not be trusted, it is useless in the end. It is also a good idea to compare two of your sources just to see if the information matches.

After reading through chapter 4 of the book, I would have to say I agree with their set up of beginning a research paper. There are 7 steps: Find a topic, Narrow your topic through initial research, Develop questions to guide your research, Use your questions to help you find sources, Engage with your sources, Decide on your argument, and Evaluate your sources. I enjoy that they break down how to begin writing a research paper for you, because, personally, I am always stumped on my first move. I like to have everything mapped out for myself when I start or even throughout my papers, so this model is helpful in this case. The book also goes very into detail about each and every step to give you a better understanding of what you should do next which is also very helpful.

Rhetorical Analysis (Blog Post #4)

This past week I wrote my first college paper. It was a Rhetorical Analysis regarding Etsy.com. Personally, this paper differed a lot from every high school paper I had ever written. In high school they enforced the “five paragraph” essay format, and had little to no peer editing available. This Rhetorical Analysis was a brighter change with more freedom and lots of help readily available.

My resources for the subject were very limited. I mainly referred to Etsy’s website. If I was pretty familiar with a subject, it was not difficult to go into more detail about that subject. With that being said, it was easy to just view Etsy’s website and organize necessary information with other like information. I made use of the OWL Purdue website for citation help. As for additional assistance, I made sure to use a search engine such as Google to research or refresh my brain on concepts I needed more help with. I also made use of the peers I had available. Along with class peer reviews, I also asked many of my friends to just take a look over my work for the most feedback I could have received.

I did the best with what I could find, but it would have been more helpful if there were, perhaps, examples of other rhetorical analyses that I could have compared my work to. I also have a tight schedule most of the week, though I would like to make time to get more help in one of the writing labs. If I ever do not have time to visit the writing lab during work hours, I think it would have been beneficial if there were a peer review website to give back feedback. With more feedback, I feel I would have been more confident on my paper. Perhaps one day someone will put this website idea to action!

Peer Review

1. In what ways was this peer review session different from your past experiences with peer review? For those of you who have never done anything like peer review before, what surprised you about this new experience?

This peer review session did not really differ to ones I would have had in high school. It was very similarly structured.

2. What did you learn about your writing and your analysis draft during peer review?

During peer review I received some tactics I had never thought of that I would like to take advantage of. Hopefully with this new approach, it will aid my paper in being the best it can be.

3. What was most helpful about peer review? Would you be open to doing this again for this class or another class?

The most helpful thing about peer review was receiving helpful criticisms and guidance on how to create a better paper from a different point of view. I would definitely be open to doing this again based on the positive feedback I received.

Bad Websites

http://www.rudgwicksteamshow.co.uk/

1. What do you think the purpose and the audience of the site are? What rhetorical appeals are being used?

The purpose of the site is to act as a digital flyer for the “Rudgwick Steam & Country Show”. The audience it is trying to appeal to is anyone who may be interested in attending the Rudgwick Steam & Country Show. Perhaps mainly the locals. I see a lot of attempts to use logos by providing the reader proper dates for the function and other factual information.

2. Select 3-5 major problems that, in your opinion, should be changed. Be sure to click around and test the navigation of the site.

Some major issues I believe should be changed in this site are the alignment, color contrasting, its navigation, and repetition. Even though all the information is fitting inside a border in the center of the screen, everything is very jumbled and on top of one another. The color contrasting is, personally, painful to the eyes. The royal blue text on a black background is not pleasing to my eyes. The site’s navigation is a little jumbled. It only offers tabs to take you to “pics” of previous years, and its other useful tabs could be labeled differently to better guide me, as a reader. Finally, there is no repetition. There is so much going on in one tiny space that makes me, the audience, a little anxious.

3. Write a bit about the effects this site may have on the audience’s ability to view it.  What does it enable or prevent?  Reference the problems you identified above.

The effects on this site are not very pleasing. It is obvious the designer of this website wanted to make the site seem as though it was similar to a excessively colorful flyer for the Rudgwick Steam & Country Show. But because there is so much going on, I could barely understand the website was to promote this show.

4. What elements of CRAP are (or are not) being used here?

Their use of contrasting, repetition, alignment, and proximity (CRAP) is not the best. As I previously mentioned, their use of contrasting colors is entirely too distracting in all directions. As the reader, I cannot agree very well with red text on a yellow background or blue text on a black background. They also do not maintain very much repetition with their excessive use of different fonts and color schemes. Their not-so-great alignment is terribly noticeable and very distracting. My eyes aren’t sure where to be looking. Finally, they have little to no proximity in their theme. There’s just too much going on.

How would I describe my Purdue experience? 

For my parents,  

Mommy loves the bears around campus.
 
Following in mommy’s footsteps.
 
The only things louder than the bell tower are the cicadas.
  
For my friends,  

So much love for my adorable , gummy-bear-giving roommate. Wouldn’t trade her and the cute sticky notes for the world.
 
I call this “The Unlucky Freshman”.
 
A world with Insomnia Cookies is a great world indeed.

For campus administration,  

A bit of love for the prettiest of sceneries.
 
I have been told I am a very lucky freshman to be living in such living quarters. It is quite nice in here.
     
Just enjoying the scenery of Purdue.